--- "AscentStage-owner@yahoogroups.com"
<freon@...> wrote:

> fifteen minutes of work - somebody out there willing
> to correct this
> into a valid screenplay format? I have to read it in
> Word 2000 but my
> laptop is down so I'm doing it in text. Never done
> it before so I
> thought I'd shoot it past you guys first.
>
> PS serializing this for now. You'll be the first to
> see what becomes
> of it.

Okay, it took a bit longer than fifteen minutes... but
here's a version in proper screenplay format. I did
rewrite a few things to smooth it out some, but you
can see what I did.

Remember:
It's only what you SEE and what you HEAR.

Oh, and the voiceovers are what they call "heavy"...
too much talk, not enough shot changing.

A personal opinion.





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